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I'm trying to write a horror story and this is the first one I'll write. If possible, please ask for feedback.
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The 27-year-old "Kai" had just hung up the phone from her home, a smile of joy appeared on her face. Due to increased work responsibilities, she hasn't been home at all these past two years. Her company doesn't have holiday holidays like other people do, but for Mother's Day this year, she decided to go home. No matter how busy the company is, she will go.
In fact, she had been so persistent in bidding farewell to her boss on every festival that had passed since the beginning of this year. He must have felt remiss on this Mother's Day. She hurriedly packed the necessary items into the suitcase that was on display. On the dark oak table in the corner of the room, she picked up her car keys and looked out the window of her condo on the thirtieth floor. She liked the view here very much, and that was the reason she bought this room. You must say goodbye to the atmosphere you were used to for a while. It is more beautiful than every day you used to look at it, probably because in the past days you looked away with a heavy burden, but now those things will not exist in your life. for a while
The traffic out of Bangkok was very boring, in fact the traffic in the entire city. Having lived in Bangkok for many years, she still hadn't gotten used to it. 3 hours to escape from the belt of boredom and another 6-7 hours to enter the territory of Phitsanulok Province. In just a moment, the dark clouds floating in the sky poured down a crazy downpour, as if wanting the entire world to be submerged. The thundering sound of the lightning was splitting the sky into two halves. It came with a wind that seemed ready to blow away everything in its path.
She tried to keep driving because the next few hundred meters to the university where she graduated was falling so heavily that visibility was difficult and she was at risk of an accident. She remembers. That there was a place nearby for her to stop and wait for this madness to end. "Sigh....just a little more."
She sighed and moaned with regret. Well, beyond Phitsanulok, it's actually Phetchabun, her hometown province.
She turned the car over and parked it in front of a dormitory. Parked the car and locked it in the shade. Walked into the dormitory and sat down on the marble horse that was set up in front of the building. This was the dormitory she had rented while she was studying. She planned to wait here until the rain subsided.
5 hours had passed and it was still raining continuously and there was no sign of it getting any lighter. She decided to pick up the phone to call home that she would be coming home later than expected. It was already 10:00 p.m. Until now, the two of you must have been waiting anxiously for their daughter's return. "Seven missed calls."
appeared on the phone screen. It must have been Mom and Dad. She was a little upset with herself for not turning on the phone's incoming call notification sound. She called back.
"Mom, I'm coming back a little late. It's raining heavily. I'm in Phitsanulok at the dormitory I rented while I was at university."
"It's okay, child. Wait for the rain to stop and then come. Are there any places to stay nearby in case it rains all night at our house? All day. If it doesn't stop raining for a while, then you can rent a daily dormitory first, then come tomorrow." The mother replied, worried that her daughter
"Yes, I love you, Mom. Happy Mother's Day. Mom and Dad, you can go to sleep now. I'll call you back when I get home and say I can't afford to rent a dormitory for the day." The conversation between the two mothers and daughters ended with the mother's side. Hang up
Kai walked into the central part of the dormitory with a backpack full of belongings to contact the staff to move in. After paying at the counter, the staff walked her and took her to the far end of the room. It was such a pleasure for her that she handed her the keys and instructed her on a few rules and walked away.
She opened the door and entered the room. The first thought that popped into her head was that she wanted to take a nice shower and then get some sleep. She wanted tomorrow morning to come already. The warm water from the shower revitalized her once again. After getting dressed, she lay down to sleep to get rid of the fatigue that had accumulated throughout the day. Even though the lights in the room had not been turned off, let alone her body. She was so exhausted that she didn't want to do anything but let her body sleep for the rest of the night.
The phone that had been set as an alarm rang. She woke up sleepily and turned it off. She could see the clock number on the phone screen that said it was 7:30 a.m. The new day had arrived, but the rain was still pounding down. It was annoying. She picked up her phone and sat down to scroll through the news feed, seeing various news sporadically but the ones that caught her attention.
Now it is probably news that several twenty-seven-year-old working women in Phetchabun Province and neighboring provinces have disappeared in the past three months. She has seen this news in passing but didn't pay attention. It was a waste, but now it made her so paranoid that she turned off the phone and picked up the television remote and turned it on to relieve her boredom. But after a while she had to turn it off because of the news on TV that came on. It was about the disappearance of a young woman that she had read about earlier on Facebook. She was really suspicious because right now the cause could not be found. But as long as she was annoyed by the rain, the paranoia that In her heart, it couldn't get any bigger, and the paranoia would even turn into more and more annoyance.”
It was raining heavily and I was late coming home even though I should have arrived yesterday and there were other scary things like this. Sigh...." She thought to herself and took out a breath.
An hour later, as if by magic, the rain that had been pounding like crazy had stopped unnaturally. It was like this. Thinking of coming, thinking of going, Kai hurriedly walked to check out with haste. The staff proceeded. Just a few moments of concise action and it was finished. She walked towards the parked car.
"No, no, don't mess with me," an aunt's voice shouted.
Kai turned to look in the direction of the voice and saw a middle-aged man talking nonsense to that auntie. He was wearing a black shirt and jeans and his hair was disheveled like he was a pop artist or something like that, but she didn't have the time. She had to rush home because it was going to rain again. She opened the door of her sedan, put her bag in the backseat, turned the key, and drove off.
About three hours later, we entered the area of Phetchabun province. If the water hadn't flooded along the way, it would have taken only about an hour and a half. Thirty minutes later, she had stopped the car in front of a house. There was an empty area of about two meters around the house, surrounded by a wall to divide the house's territory. Each house has an upper floor made of wood and a lower floor made of cement.
The front entrance of the house is decorated with flowers and small trees. She walked in front of the door and shouted to the people inside.
"Here it is, my child." The mother's voice told her child as she walked quickly but cautiously to open the door. The young woman hugged her mother with happiness. The two hugged each other in happiness.
"What about father and mother?" Kai asked his mother.
"Let's go see Grandma. She'll come soon. Come into the house first, my son. I've finished cooking but I have to take a shower first."
"Okay," she replied, kissing her mother's cheek.
"I haven't seen you kiss my father." An elderly man's voice sounded.
"Dad, hello." She raised her hand in greeting and hugged her father again, then kissed his cheek.
"I'm going to take a shower first so we can eat. Don't eat first, you must eat together."
The two responded in unison. What a happy family!
Kai finished taking a shower and she walked down the stairs to the ground floor. She saw her father sitting and accounting for income and expenses, while her mother was sitting on the phone. The two of them talked about general things like old people do. Mother told the news and pyramid scheme letters. That was sent via Line to Dad as well. It's one of the things in the family that Kai doesn't like. Soda is used to cure cancer, needles are inserted into the fingertips to give first aid to people who have had a stroke, and many other things. She used to argue. Big time at home because of this too, until it got to the point where she thought she couldn't take it anymore. No matter how much she tried to talk, they wouldn't listen. She decided to let it go, even though deep inside she knew that it would be She indirectly killed them. Many times she blamed herself for this matter. From then on, she tried to behave well and make them happy. It was assumed that she would make them happy at the end of their lives. She wanted to make them happy. She could get more than this, but it was really only this. She apologized to her two parents in her heart, then walked down to sit on the chair and smiled at her father and mother. Her mother smiled back and picked up a glass of water with orange juice to drink. until it was all gone and told her and her father that
"Eat this first. Mom squeezed the orange juice herself. You eat too.” Mother handed her a glass of water with orange juice in it and then gave another glass to Father. The two of them drank it all. Mother opened the rice cooker and scooped out rice. Her favorite black brown rice was on it. In front of the family dinner began. She scooped up the chicken tom kha first. No matter how much time had passed, the taste of her mother's food was still to her liking. She felt dizzy and felt like she was about to faint, her headache felt like it was about to explode, and the image in front of her slowly faded away.
"Don't worry, sir. If we can do this, the two of us will be young again. The teacher told us to roast it on the stove first," the old woman said to her husband, who was sitting looking at his son like crazy. Worried, he knew that this would be the last time he would ever see his beloved daughter. He nodded to show that he understood that Auntie Wan next door was the one who had brought the man over. About a month ago, he was wearing a black shirt and jeans and his hair was disheveled like a pop artist or something like that. Auntie Wan said that he was an acquaintance of a close friend and now the two of them were quite close. So I'd like to introduce them both to this man. He said his name was "Kham" is an artist who paints for sale but is not very famous. They talked about various life experiences with great taste. After the conversation ended he gave his aunt an old notebook the next day. Wan and a man named Kam said that they would go to the beach in Chachoengsao together with friends of the same age. She didn't tell her many details. It would be good for her aunt to get some rest. Elderly people should be able to live their lives as they please. Sometimes his aunt's daughter was one of the victims who disappeared. Her husband passed away a long time ago. Having a group of friends the same age might make her feel better, but he himself couldn't help but be worried because since She hadn't returned yet, it had been a long time since she had gone on an elderly trip. His thoughts were halted when the sound of his phone, which had been set to alarm at 8:30 p.m., rang. It was a telltale sign. That it's time to do the things that need to be done.
Kai awoke standing with her legs and arms tied to a concrete pole. Her mouth was covered with thick tape. The lights in the room were on as incandescent bulbs. In front of her, there was a concrete formation that looked like The bathtub inside was filled with charcoal and dried pine needles. In the corner of the room was a metal crate the size she could fit in. Surrounded by gardening tools and tools were scattered everywhere. To her right was a white-painted concrete staircase that led up to the room. Higher up, she didn't understand what was happening at all, but it definitely wasn't a good thing. What should she do now? No matter how much she tried to push it, she couldn't get out. Then she heard the sound of the door opening. Who was there? People were walking down here, that's right her mother and father, they had come to save her from this dishonest situation.
"Let's get started," Mom said. What are you starting? Please help me first. Mother, she doesn't want to be in this situation anymore. Dad looked at his watch and said, "It's not yet 9:00 p.m., so wait a moment." Kai looked at the two of them in confusion. Whatever was going on, Mom and Dad must have been involved. She thought so as her mother walked up to her and caressed her cheek, looking at her with loving eyes that overflowed with tears, which then streamed down her cheeks as she told her ten times she loved her. time She didn't understand what was going on. What were her parents planning to do? The fear inside of her was overwhelming. She tried to fight as hard as she could, even though deep She understood that it was hardly helping at all. Her mother withdrew from her and looked at her with tears in her eyes, her father standing beside her.
"Don't move, babe, don't move," her mother said in a voice that sounded like she was showing concern, but it was so inconsistent with what she was doing. She struggled like that and tried to shout and beg for help from both of them, but it was no use. She was beginning to run out of energy.
Her father turned to her mother and said, "It's time to start at 9:00 p.m." Her mother smiled at her father and jumped up and bit her on the left side of his neck. A bite-sized piece of meat came out and he pushed her away. Crying out in pain, struggling in agony, holding the wound with his right hand. "What!!! What are you doing? Hey!!!"
He screamed loudly at his mother who had been thrown towards her, staggering and regaining her footing to run towards him, but this time he pushed her away just in time to bounce her towards the corner of the room where there were iron crates and tools scattered around. She regained her balance on her feet. Picking up the pickaxe, Father looked at her in panic and tried to run towards the stairs, but he was too slow.
Mother reached Father first. The wooden skewer handle was hit on Father's back until it made a loud noise of pain. Father slapped his arm back and hit Mother in the face. Mother staggered with the force. Father picked up the pickaxe, hoping to hold it. It was only a weapon of self-defense. Her mother regained her composure and rushed towards him again, but this time the tip of the pickaxe pierced her right eye and surrounding area. He didn't know what to do with the incident. It was just his body's reaction. He killed her. Damn it.
He was still frightened, looking like he was losing his mind and confusion. Her mother pulled the pickaxe away from her face in that state. Was she not dead yet? Was it really her mother? It was like a nightmare for her father to see like that. She let out a loud cry. Mother stabbed the pickaxe into the middle of Father's chest and supported him. Then she bit his right cheek, chewed the flesh that had come out, and swallowed it. Is this hell? Damn it. She struggled. Once again, she struggled as her mother, or whatever it was, slowly walked towards her with a pickaxe in hand that had just been pulled out of her father's body. It slammed the pickaxe handle. It hit her stomach seven or eight times in pain, as if her body would be shattered. She vomited and had excruciating pain in her stomach. It stabbed the sharp edge of a pickaxe into both of her knees. She wanted to scream. He came out, but his previous injuries hadn't hurt us one bit. He walked to the corner of the room again, opened the iron crate, picked up a water bottle that already contained gasoline, and walked straight to the tub, which was already filled with charcoal. She poured gasoline all over and walked to the corner of the room again, slowly pushing the iron crate closer to her, picking up the pickaxe again and stabbing it into her left arm over and over until it was torn off. She almost died, secretly hoping that someone would save her from this torture, either stop her breathing or kill this hellish creature and take her to the hospital.
But she hoped first of all that someone would come and help her.
Then he cut the rope that bound her limbs and slowly dragged her exhausted, breathing body into that damned iron crate and closed the lid. Then he walked over to her father's corpse and reached into his left trouser pocket and picked out the lock. She came out and locked it down, took out a box of matches from her pocket, lit it and threw it into the tub. The flames rose up and the smell of burning coals touched her nostrils like the smell of death that Death had sent to warn her before. It will emerge from hell and take your soul down there with a bang.
Then the sound of a gun rang out and the body of the hellish creature in her mother's body fell. “This is the police officer. You don't have to be afraid, we're here to help you, and you'll be safe.” Ten minutes later, she was rushed to a rescue vehicle guarded by a dozen police officers and first aid was started on her. I want it to be like that, like in movies where no matter how bad things get in the end, there will always be someone to help the main character escape from danger. The steel crate containing her body was slowly lifted up and placed on top of that tub. Right now, it was like a cremated corpse. The temperature around her was slowly rising. She should have died before then, or it should have killed her. She writhed in agony. She screamed as loud as she could, but it was only in her throat because the thick tape covering her mouth prevented her from opening her mouth. But it didn't matter, there was definitely a chance that she would scream again because It was now slowly melting as her skin was slowly maturing as well.
Farewell, poor girl, your terrible torment has come to a pitiful end.
The alarm clock that had been set for 5 a.m. rang. Mother Kai woke up after a very pleasant sleep because she knew that after waking up she would receive the most wonderful thing. Washing her face, brushing her teeth and going about her daily routine after waking up in a cheerful mood, it was time for a wonderful breakfast. A charred body with no left arm lay spread out on the table. She used a knife to slowly cut it. The meat came out and he used a fork to poke it into his mouth. The sun shone brightly and hit his face. The dewdrops clinging to the surface of the trees and grass slowly evaporated and turned into steam with the intense heat. The morning had arrived in the place where It was not crowded like this. It was such a wonderful moment. The door opened and a woman walked out with two suitcases. She was the mother of the chicken. She looked like a different person from the youth she had lost to time. Night time comes again
She walked straight to her daughter's car, which was the apple of her eye. The car keys she had found from searching her daughter's room were broken into pieces, the engine sounded, and the car slowly took off to its destination in Chachoengsao.
In the car, she looked at the old notebook that was on the front console and thought back to about a month ago, after the first day she had met the man named Kham through Auntie Wan's introduction. The two walked together before leaving. We sat and talked for a moment, then Auntie Wan took out a small stainless steel box for coins. Inside were five or six black spheres the size of grapes. They must have been her usual lozenges or medicines, but Auntie Wan said they were fruits. She couldn't remember what their names were. Auntie Wan handed them over. She had one child and a man named Kham had another child, his own being the first to eat it. As soon as she swallowed it, she felt something different than before but couldn't tell what it was. Her vision blurred for a moment as her neighbor sat and looked at her, and then everything returned to normal. Aunt Wan picked up another box of stainless steel and handed it to her, as for the man named Kham. Handing her a piece of paper, she looked at them as they slowly got up and walked out of her house. She looked at the piece of paper and it said,
“First, to begin a ritual to reclaim youth, either the woman or the man should eat half of the body of the other while still breathing or newly dead. Previously, the one who took action should have already had a black seed growing in their body, which took a month to grow after ingesting it. Read the steps in the notebook I just gave you yesterday after taking action. When it's finished, come see me in Chachoengsao. Until that day, you'll know which way to go and where the place is."
Finishing the message on the paper, she picked up a black pill the size of a grape from the stainless steel box, put it in her mouth and continued driving....